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Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. Do you agree or disagree?

#research #governments #companies
Scientific
research
 plays an important role in the development of humanity. Some people think that scientific
research
 should be carried out and controlled by
the governments rather than
Suggestion
governments rather than the
 private companies. Personally, I believe that private companies can have a responsibility to carry out
research
. From one side, scientific
research
 requires a huge amount of money to be conducted which can put pressure on
nation budget
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the nation's budget
nation's budget
 (state budget). Government has to pay a lot for citizen’s live
(
Accept space
(
life
)
Accept space
)
so if they have to handle scientific
research
, it will affect some important areas
such
 as education or health care.
However
, private companies can do
research
 which is not carried out by governments (???) (
without
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Without
 carrying out by governments). In fact, private companies have an abundance of capital (???)
that
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That
 can share the financial with government. From the other side, if scientific
research
are carried
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is carried
 out and controlled only by private companies, there will be some negative effect.(
affects
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Affects
) Without government control, some private companies can conduct illegal
research
 related to nuclear weapons or human experiments which cause a serious threat to society.
Besides
, some
research
 done by private companies
do not ensure
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does not ensure
 quality that
can affects
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can affect
(
Accept space
(
effect) the prestige. In short, there are many ways to look at different sides of a matter and there have
also
 been opposite opinions on
this
 particular topic.
Although
 scientific
research
 should be carried out by private companies, the government
also
 needs control over these
research
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researches
.
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  • scientific research
  • carried out
  • controlled
  • governments
  • private companies
  • unbiased
  • prioritize
  • profit
  • public interest
  • allocate resources
  • lucrative
  • collaboration
  • information sharing
  • confidential
  • competitive advantage
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