some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching television or playing computer games for children. to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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reading
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Reading
stories from a
book
is
better way
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a better way
for children to occupy knowledge and increase the capacity of
mind
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the mind
.
therefore some
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Therefore, some
Therefore some
parents asked their children to read
book
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books
instead
of watching
televison
broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
television
or playing computer.
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an analytic or interpretive literary composition
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will argue that electronic devices
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are slightly
dangerous for children.
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The
most important argument
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refers to the speaker or writer
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would bring
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to
this
part is that learning from a
book
is proper method that would help the children in long lasting term.
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Because
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of reading clears the thought and
also
helps in
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texting
.
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And
focusing power of children
also
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from reading his favourite
book
or
storie
a message that tells the particulars of an act or occurrence or course of events; presented in writing or drama or cinema or as a radio or television program
story
book
. Reading
book
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a book
like
steve
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Steve
jobs helps the children that how to survive in life among very difficult situation. But the main thing is in
book
that knowledge
can not
can not
cannot
be
worthless
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worth less
anytime
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any time
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
reading
book
is
best option
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the best option
among the watching
T
.
V
or playing computer for children to open their mind.
However
,
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
other many counter claim and argue that playing computers may increase the
sportmanspirit
and develops the sports skills while some of the television channel runs the educational activities that helps the children to learn from the
T
.
V
like discovery channel provides very
interseting
arousing or holding the attention
interesting
show about
learning living
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learning, living
things and
physical but
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physical, but
accoring
(followed by 'to') in agreement with or accordant with
according
to me watching
T
.
V
&
playning
the act of playing a musical instrument
playing
planning
computers may be addicted for children and they
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
their
focuses
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focus
while watching and learning from the
T
.
V
.
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This
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an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
will argue that some people believe that watching
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the thing named or in question
it
.
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V
or playing
coputers
a machine for performing calculations automatically
computers
is
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are
dangerous from some instances like
addiction
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an addiction
. In my opinion reading
book
is extremely
worthable
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wearable
for children
compare
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compared
to the advantage of the watching
T
.
V
or playing computer.
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