Prison is the best punishment for criminals. Discuss.

These days, we can see everywhere different kind of victims of
crime
. But what is the most effective method to
this
situation? Some people think that
prison
is the best punishment for criminals.
However I
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However, I
100% disagree with
this
opinion
. I will support my
opinion
with examples. The main reason of my
opinion
is that life in
prison
is better than life in freedom to some criminals who do not have accommodation.
For example
, in
prison
they have food three times per a day, they do not think about money to pay for living place, and they get clothes absolutely free. And while they live in
prison
, they do not think about money which they should pay for living placement. And
this
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
thus
all things, despite of their
crime
. The
second
reason why I disagree with
this
opinion
is that, in spite of their bad
crime government
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crime, government
think that they should sit in
prison
. In my view, it is not enough for them. Because if they killed someone they just sit in
prison
, but that person who was killed cannot return to life with their sitting in a
prison
. I think that they
also
should be killed by the government.
On the other hand
, they can study to not do a
crime
with sitting in
prison
.
For instance
, if they sit in one place every day do not do any activity or without walking out, without seeing a person who is close to them, he or she will miss anything which is in freedom. In conclusion, I want to say that
prison
is not enough for some criminals, who did bad
crime
. But for some criminals, it would be enough to do, not do anymore crimes.
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