Many societies has its homeless people some people think that the best way to help them is give them money. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays, people who do not have their own house and decide to live in
public space
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a public space
public spaces
can be found in many countries of the world. Some people suggest that giving the
money
can resolve
this
problem
. I totally disagree with
this
initiative because
this
is not a sustainable way and the number of homeless people can increase from
this
solution
. Providing
money
to homeless people is a temporary
solution
since we do not know the background of
individual person
Suggestion
individual persons
individual people
the individual person
an individual person
. How they become homeless.
For example
, some people become homeless because of their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
eg
.
drug
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Drug
addict,
alcoholic or
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alcoholic, or
gambler etc.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
that, they loss all of
money
and everything in their life.
Hence
, giving
money
to those people
do not help
Suggestion
does not help
this
problem
from root-cause. If they do not change themselves, they will not realize the
valuable
Suggestion
value
of the
money
and do the same thing that they have done and end up with the same
problem
.
Moreover
, giving
money
is not only short-term
solution but
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solution, but
also
, increasing the number of homeless people. Using
this
way to help homeless people without criteria and limitation lead to people who face the same
problem
lack of motivation to earning their living by themselves and become homeless for receiving
money
from societies.
For instance
, some people have ability to work adversely they become homeless because of laziness.
From
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For
this
reason, if we still use
this
way to tackle the
problem
, we will find homeless more and more in every
communities
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community
. To sum up, every
communities
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community
face
Suggestion
faces
a
problem
with homeless
people
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people, however
however
, if societies only help them to live by
money but
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money, but
do not
considered
Suggestion
consider
the root-cause of the
problem
, it will not a long-term
solution
Hence
, homeless will increase continuously. We cannot get rid of
this
problem
in societies.
Submitted by Sitanun Ngampatipatpong on

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