Children are now less active in their free time that in the past. Therefore, sports lesson must be compulsory in schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

nowadays, due to do
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significant advances of science, many people, especially children and teenager have reduced their physical activity and most children and spend a lot of time playing computer games and watching TV which means that few of them go to sports and physical activities outside the home that cause many problems for them ,
for example
unfit and overweight .I strongly agree that sport lessons are mandatory in schools.
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people especially
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people, especially
in low-income countries think that sport is just for fun wastes time and they say children should spend all their time studying to become doctors or engineers in the future.Sports has many benefits, I would argue that these positive aspects are outweighed by the drawbacks.
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I can say that sports and exercising before going to class calms the mind
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reduce stress and increases children's learning ability
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Secondly
, exercise and physical activity promotes their health and prevents disease
such
as
diabets
a polygenic disease characterized by abnormally high glucose levels in the blood; any of several metabolic disorders marked by excessive urination and persistent thirst
diabetes
, obesity and heart disease. Governments have to spend a lot of money to treat them includes Building hospitals and buy a lot of medicine While compulsion sports in schools or building sports facilities for people is less cost.
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reason for my opinion is that children who are interested in sports can be successful in
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the future
if they are supported by their families and government.
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example Ronaldo
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example, Ronaldo
and Messi while they don't have any Academy learning, but they are successful and popular footballer in the world. In conclusion
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can say prevention is better than cure and
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agree that sports should compulsory in schools.
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I
strongly
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
a healthy mind need a healthy body
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • digital entertainment
  • physical health
  • childhood obesity
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • discipline
  • compulsory
  • curriculum
  • athletic
  • extracurricular
  • concentration
  • logistical challenges
  • financial challenges
  • preventive health measures
  • well-rounded development
  • mandatory participation
  • physical education
  • lifestyle diseases
  • motivation techniques
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