As countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh the disadvantages for the environment?

In economically developed
countries there
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countries, there
are
more number
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number
of
peoples
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people
buying cars and using it
.
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.
There are many advantages to
use
cars rather not using cars daily.It makes people
travel
faster using personal
car
firstly
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Firstly
, public in most of the countries
dont have
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doesn't have
don't have
availabity
the quality of being at hand when needed
availability
to
travel
through bus or taxi
but
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But
it is easy to
travel
in own
vehicle
like
is
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being
pretty much better
.
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.
Moreover
, in public transport like buses or taxis there will be huge population travelling in it so there are many chances to get
spead
distance travelled per unit time
speed
spread
spayed
covid
overlaid or spread or topped with or enclosed within something; sometimes used as a combining form
covered
virus in people
.
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.
As an example
,
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,
In Italy a boy has corona positive he has travelled in bus people in the same bus who are with
also
tested positive after the results came
.
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.
Thus having
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Thus, having
a own
vehicle
like
car
is much better than travelling in public
vehcles
a conveyance that transports people or objects
vehicles
.
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.
In
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On
the other
hand there
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hand, there
is plethora of pollution in air so It is critical to
travel
outside without having
vehicle
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a vehicle
.
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If a person has own
vehicle
like
car
then
that could be better to
elimate
terminate, end, or take out
eliminate
from dust
.
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.
Eventhough
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Even though
there are across 1.3
crores
of people in
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
cannot
use
their own
car but
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car, but
most of the population in
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
will tend to
use
their own
vehicle
having a
vehicle
get rid from pollution and it
also
safe to
travel
.
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.
Having own
vehicle
can make
to
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travel
travel
fast neither travelling on
bus
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the bus
a bus
buses
. To conclude
,
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,
Using own
car
is comfortable and much
significant
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more significant
than using public vehicles and it
also
safe for health
.
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.
Every government should be
concious
intentionally conceived
conscious
concise
to
use
their own
car
and should encourage society to prefer
car
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal mobility
  • convenience
  • commuting
  • quality of life
  • personalized space
  • carbon emissions
  • global warming
  • air pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental degradation
  • resource depletion
  • electric vehicles
  • carpooling
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