Today , the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Nowadays, the quality of products sells become one of the most consumer goods to use many advertising. In fact, in the community what I see that in existence no needs to sell. In my opinion, In my opinion, I do not agree, why? In

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era, online sells being one of popular in Indonesia, while teenagers can choose any kinds of business trend for their lifestyle. By using many advertising, people see make them want to get the new products.

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a company struggle how their products can sell for society. The firm will always give new ideas to encourage people to buy from their poster like in social media or around the roads poster. Looking at more specific, Jakarta is the central business in Indonesia, many foreigners sell their goods in the mall.

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, they like to see a new brand from other countries. A firm will always see how their products can be empty and deploy to the community.

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, not all people want to buy the goods from advertising. They will choose to go directly in the display and ask to the owner about the goods.

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, for someone who do not have more money to buy what they see from advertising. People

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believe with the ads because in the matter, the goods is not really good condition.

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why hey decide to join in the group and trying to pick the best goods for them.

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, they think that from the poster is not

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. In conclusion, I definitely not agree the rising sales will encourage more advertising. Which for the poor society,

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people will choose to buy in the retail and make they are easy to buy,

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depend on the products.

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consumer behavior
perceived need
lifestyle aspirations
brand image
prestige
psychological techniques
scarcity
social proof
celebrity endorsements
technological advancements
product innovations
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Today , the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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