average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge.

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percieved

detected by instinct or inference rather than by recognized perceptual cues

perceived

that

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next generation

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the next generation

will have

poor

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poorer

health

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status than what we have today. I stand by the statement that the present

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health care

infrasture

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has been sabotaged, but if we go

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reality check, the condition is even worse.

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essay shall discuss in detail about the same. Looking out from the present viewpoint of Covid-19, most of the

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Mohalla

clinics and government

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was well developed

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were well developed

but under-utilised. So with proper knowledge from experienced medical fraternity can be put

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into

action

alongwith

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along with

the government official's management skills that could help put to better symbiosis. Foreseeing

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ongoing situation, it would be fine to predict that future is in risky hands. The healthcare

facilities even

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facilities, even

if available, it is not being utilised to its best for

genral public

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the general public

general public

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, consumer's understanding about

health

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and

health

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products is not

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up to

the mark. The gym culture is dominating the market. Nobody is ready to accept their dependence on

convinience

the state of being suitable or opportune

convenience

foods, more of

refined food intake

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a refined food intake

the refined food intake

, low consumption of fruits and vegetable are

few major concerns

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a few major concerns

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leading to rising incidence of cardiovascular diseases, obesity and hypertension much earlier than it used to occur before. Sedentary lifestyle, easy transport, no physical activity are important

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contributory

to early onset of metabolic syndrome. Owing to the same, I

standby

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stand by

the view point that with reduced diet quality and dynamic changes in lifestyle are primary contributors to early onset of ill-

health

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. So it can be said that when our apple is sour we must cut it before it gets rotten.

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Similarly when

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Similarly, when

our defence mechanism is weaker than our enemy, we are prone to fail

even before even

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even before

we can start.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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279 words

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average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge.

Fully explain your ideas

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Some people feel that manufactures and supermarkets have the responsibilities to reduce the amount of packaging of goods, other argue that consumers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging Discuss both views and give your opinion