Multi-cultural societies, in which there is a mixture of different ethnic peoples, bring more benefits than drawbacks to a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent days, many agree that multi-cultural societies are more beneficial than detrimental to a country. I believe that
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it has several drawbacks, the benefits dwarf them. To start with, the two main merits are the boost to tourism and the natural friendliness.
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, one self-evident advantage of
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is the likelihood to attract more tourists using a diverse range of cultures.
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, the 54 ethnic groups in Vietnam have attracted millions of visitors per annum, reported by a recent survey.
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, another notable advantage is their attitude towards nature. Different peoples lead different lifestyles, thereby utilizing given resources distinctly. One case in point is the Muong people in Vietnam who only eat vegetables and are all friendly with wild animals, which helps preserve numerous endangered species and benefits the national agriculture with their arable lands. Despite the previously mentioned advantages,
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entails two major demerits, namely the low education and lack of community exposure. One noteworthy disadvantage is the low level of education since they mostly live in jungles.
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would prevent them from having proper education which is more in urban areas,
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the difficulties in dealing with certain problems in life,
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, indigestions and predator attacks.
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that, they
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lack
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community exposure. Most people in the same ethnic groups live together and
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, they hardly go out and interact with other ethnic groups.
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in the long term would give rise to boredom in life. In conclusion, having weighed up the pros and cons, I believe these inconveniences can be solved, and they much pale in comparison with the benefits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multiculturalism
  • cultural diversity
  • economic prosperity
  • social cohesion
  • integration
  • cultural assimilation
  • ethnic diversity
  • cultural exchange
  • global influence
  • inclusive governance
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