Some people think that it is important to construct new buildings rather than wasting money on maintaining old ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Today many
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Today, many
people claim that too much money is being allocated
to
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for
the upkeep of older buildings that would be better utilised on modern infrastructure. In my opinion, though new buildings are more practical, old buildings are indispensable cultural relics.
First
of all, those old
architecture
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architectures
tells about a
countries
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country's
countries'
efforts how they change situations for better,
also
about the heroic people who did good to provide facilities for better generation.
For instance
, The great wall of china is representing the dedication of the king and effort of the people to protect nations from other. The Tajmahal was built by king Shahjahan to express his love for her wife. Those
building
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buildings
are the wonders now as they are acting as inspiration for us, so it is totally meaningless not to protect them.
Secondly
, historical places are
main tourist attraction
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the main tourist attraction
of a country. Not only it represents ones culture and
art but
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art, but
also
sets a good tourist business. Millions of money
are being added
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is being added
to
countries economy
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the countries economy
a countries economy
for those historical monuments. So destroying them is a way of big economic loss. A historical building is a great object for architectural historian. Many lost civilization has come in front of us with all those buildings,
also
act as a source of information for research work. There are many buildings in the world which is a wonder of engineering work that acts as inspiration for modern engineer.
Therefore
, replacing all old one with new buildings
is
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has been
just a big loss for whole nations both culturally and economically. And
most importantly
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most important
those monuments are taking a small place of a county. If anyone wants to build new buildings that can be done in
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
places without destroying those valuable work. Those
history
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histories
inspired us and lead us
develop
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to develop
for far better way. With the economy that earned from
tourist
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tourists
a tourist
the tourist
is helping countries to progress.
Thus
, history working silently to forward us. To sum up, a historical architecture is a
master piece
the most outstanding work of a creative artist or craftsman
masterpiece
of nations as well as a valuable asset. Government should be more dedicated and careful to beautify and protect them.
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  • heritage preservation
  • environmental sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • architectural integrity
  • cultural significance
  • retrofitting
  • economic considerations
  • modern infrastructure
  • urban development
  • historical landmark
  • construction costs
  • energy efficiency
  • community identity
  • adaptive reuse
  • sustainable development
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