Although some people value public parks, this space could be better used for other purposes such as residential areas for the ever- growing population or to develop business or boost economies. To what extent do you agree with this?

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Some individuals accept the importance of community Parks

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, others opine that

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space better utilized for constructing residential blocks to meet population and economic growth.In my opinion parks should not be replaced by building for commerce or economic purposes. In

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easy I would express my opinions in details. Parks helps us to overcome environmental pollution

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30% of residential area should be consist of parks.Since parks areas have been replaced by buildings

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cities' temperature is increased by rapid pace.Despite the fact that in new city schemes, parks are given adequate required space

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constructors mafia tries to grab parks land.

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, in India almost 20% land reserved for parks is illegally captured for selling at high rates. In Pakistan

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parks are not only used for physical exercise for

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as a community gathering place.Being located at the centre point between the buildings, these parks serves best to any age group.

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, according to American Heart Association, Walking on grass, for 30 minutes every day

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decreases the chances of heart attack to almost 50%.

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Parks are used for family gathering or events on a small scale. Place allotted for Parks should not be used for trade or economic purposes

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since every approved residential area has dedicated commercial area.

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some traditional areas lack enough space for commercial areas

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can be dealt with by high-rise shopping malls.

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malls are good for trade as well as economic growth.

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, In Lahore there are many shopping malls in the congested old city

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which was built hundreds of years ago

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without any proper planning for dedicated commercial areas. To summarize,

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trade and economic growth activities are vital

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it should not be at the expense of places for parks.Parks are indispensable for our health and we cannot compromise it.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. What the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Nowadays, education overseas has become more accessible and growing numbers of people send their offspring to study in other countries. However, this trend has its detractors. I strongly believe that the pros far outweigh the cons, and will examine both below.