Students at schools and universities learn far more from lessons with teachers than from other sources such as the internet, television. To what extent, do you agree or disagree with their opinion

School is a place from where we all begin our academic studies and
teachers
are those mentors who teach
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lesson of everyone's life.Nowadays, with the development of technology students
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from other technical resources too.
School
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and universities are the first source of our basic learning.The initiation of personal growth starts from these spots, which gives lessons for living the good life.Because
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School and college
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in childhood and in adulthood. The transition time is associated with academic life in which
teachers
always play a vital role. So I think we learn more from
teachers
than
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sources.
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am not saying that there is nothing to learn from online sites and videos
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on screen.The student learns lots of stuff from
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by surfing sites, from where they can read
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of many intellectuals.There are abundance of shows displayed on televisions related to science and technology which has beneficial effects
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would say that these sources couldn't replace
teachers
Endeavours.
For example
, in
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ancient times when there were no
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phones
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or
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TVs
, there were only
teachers
for giving
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lessons. Despite of unavailabilities of these resources, extraordinary inventions have been
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, which couldn't be possible without the teachings of mentors.
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, students waste plenty of time on
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the internets
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internets
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internet
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surfing purposeless things and watching spoiled shows
as a result
, it is likely to give
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direction to their thought process
while
teachers
always supply crucial knowledge without wastage of time.
To conclude
,
according to
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these sources are just
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of
this
fascinating world.Real
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could only be done with the assistance of
teachers
.If student listens to
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the teacher
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with concentration
than
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then
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only
these
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extra knowledge could be helpful.These videos and sites are more or less
source
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a source
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of entertainment.
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