Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

I believe that balanced
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I believe that a balanced
daily routine between
leisure
activities and the other. But these days due to abundant duties
,
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,
people work long hours without any
free
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time to break free
time
to break. Maybe a little advantages can be found in work a lot leaving
leisure
time but
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time, but
in my point of
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view, it
is
very optimistic attitude
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a very optimistic attitude
that many successful people in
works
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the works
are workaholic
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are a workaholic
! But is the fact that there is
strong relation
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a strong relation
between hard working and being professional in all fields.
Although
it depends on that choose from them.
On the other
hand if
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hand, if
this
situation is an individual decision to improve self skills and activities there is no any difficulties
to
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for
with
this
person,
even they enjoy
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even as they enjoy
it. So can ignore
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
of just working. I think, Lack of
leisure
time
has many drawbacks to people even the group who choose
this
status. But the main disadvantages like anxiety, depression, exhausted, less efficiency, addiction and so on, is too possible to the people that under the pressure of their employer or other factors. Maybe in the short period not recognized these drawbacks, but it is very clear that in a long term situation observed all of the items. In conclusion, for prevention of the disadvantages of
this
subject involved, boost the efficiency at work or other duties, help the mentality healthy in society, improve the relationship in families and reduce the social damages it is so necessary to be a rules to support the people for balanced their life that have enough
leisure
time
during the week.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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