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In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Some young people find themselves with very little leisure time. I believe there are two main causes of
this
 situation. The first is parental
pressure
 and the second is competition for
university
places
. Every parent wants to see his or her child do well in school and go on to have a successful career.
This
 means that they exert
pressure
 on their
children
 to spend hours each day studying at home. Some even arrange extra tuition for their
children
. In my own country, it is not uncommon for young people to spend another three hours at small private schools after their usual day at
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 school is over.
As a consequence
, their leisure time is extremely limited and the
pressure
 on them is considerable. The second cause is related to the higher education system. Each year, there are many times more applicants to
university
 than there are
university
places
. The result of
this
 is that only those students with very high grades manage to obtain a place.
This
 contributes to the
pressure
 on teenagers since they must work long hours to have any chance of success. One solution to the problem is for parents to be made aware of the effects of the
pressure
 they put on their
children
. Schools should inform parents that too much
pressure
 can lead to anxiety, stress and depression. They should be shown ways in which they can help their
children
 lead more balanced lives with a reasonable amount of leisure time. Another effective measure would be for the government to invest in the creation of more
university
places
.
This
 could be done by expanding existing universities or by building new ones.
This
 would have the effect of easing competition for
places
 giving teenagers some of their precious free lime back.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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