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Some people believe that robots will play an important role in future societies, while others argue that robots might have negative effect on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are some arguments about the
role
 of robots in
future
 societies. While some people think robots could have negative influence on
future
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the future life
life
, I personally believe that these machines will play a significant
role
 in
future
 communities. One the one
hand some
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hand, some
 people believe robots might have harmful effects on their lives due to several reasons.
Firstly
 robots are much more reliable, productive and efficient than humans, so they may compete with people for job opportunities especially in factories or workhouses.
As a
result many
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result, many
 people will lose their jobs and unemployment will rise in the community.
This
 may lead to bigger social issues
such
 as poverty or increased crime rate.
Secondly strong
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Secondly, strong
 dependency on robots may have
adverse effect
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an adverse effect
 on
humans’
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human
 daily
life
. A lot of household chores
such
 as washing, cleaning or cooking would be done by robots and
this
 will cause people to be less active and creative which will result in some health problems for them
such
 as obesity or heart failure.
On the other
hand I
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hand, I
 would agree with those who believe that robots would be useful for
future
 societies. They can operate in intolerable and harmful conditions.
For
example robots
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example, robots
 can contribute to space exploration, or operate in dangerous and chemical conditions.
Moreover
, robots are widely used in many boring or difficult jobs like factory packaging or agriculture as cheap
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
instead
 of humans
.
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.
 Another effective
role
 played by these machines would be helping aged people with their daily activities like walking or exercising and making their
life
 much easier and convenient by requiring less care
from
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of
 their friends and family. In
this
 way they will improve their quality of
life
 and feel better during their elderly years. For the reasons mentioned above, it seems to me that robots will play a considerable
role
 in our
future
 and they will benefit humans in many ways.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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