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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In present time, there is significant growth observed of cars
in
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on
from
 the roads.
Therefore
, it
have become
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has become
had become
becomes
is becoming
 essential to find out
alternative mode
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an alternative mode
 of transport as well as stringent law should be made. I partially agree with
above mentioned statement
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the above mentioned statement
.
This
 essay will discuss, why it is required to opt different mode of transportation and implementation of a strict
rules
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rule
. Admittedly, there are many deficits of utilization of personalized cars. Out of all the most anticipated one is, traffic jam. As more and more cars will run on the roads there is merely a possibility that, roads might get busy and
hence
, have to wait for long hours to reach at your desire place.
Therefore
, if people utilize public transportation there will be less car on
roads
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the roads
 and if there is no log jam they can reach their destination quite earlier.
Furthermore
, many cars on
roads
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the roads
 will result in increase pollution.
In addition
 to it, car pooling can be the effective approach which an individual should follow.
Government
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The government
 should implement
struct
rigidly accurate; allowing no deviation from a standard
strict
 rules like Odd-even in order to minimize the cars on the road which will eventually, beneficial in terms of pollution.
Nevertheless
, As people will not own personalized
vehicle
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vehicle, then
then
 they have to schedule their timings according to
a buses
treat badly
abuses
, in which individual is going to travel.
However
, if there is own vehicle, despite of waiting they can travel at their own convenient time. In conclusion, the essay discussed
,
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,
 It is mandatory for government to implement strict rules or create awareness, due to
log-jam
any stoppage attributable to unusual activity
logjam
 and increase in pollution.
However
, adjusting the
time according
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time, according
 to public transport is still an issue.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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