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More and more students are choosing to study in another country for higher education. Do the benefits of this outweigh the drawbacks?

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I believe that the benefits of studying in a foreign
country
 usually outweigh the drawbacks and I shall explain why in
this
 essay. The main reason that
students
 go to other
countries
 to study is because they think that the standard of education there will be higher.
Thus
,
countries
 with good reputations for providing higher education,
such
 as the USA and UK, are able to draw
students
 from around the world. Of course,
this
 has advantages for the universities that are able to attract foreign
students
 because they receive tuition fees. If, like Cambridge and Harvard, amongst others, they are able to consistently attract the cream of the world’s
students
, their reputations will continue to grow. Another reason that many
students
 give when asked why they choose to study abroad is the experience of living in a foreign
country
 and meeting different people. Again, the universities
also
 benefit from
this
 by having a wider student body. It is
also
 advantageous for
students
 studying in their own
country
 if their university can attract foreign
students
, for the same reason. There may,
however
, be disadvantages.
Students
 who go to study in foreign
countries
 often claim that they will return to their own
countries
 upon completion of those studies, to work for the betterment of their own
country
.
However
, favourable immigration laws and a taste of life in what are usually more developed
countries
 than their own are often persuasive enough to ensure that only a minority
return
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 home.
This
 has led to a so-called ‘brain drain’ in many developing
countries
, whereby many of the
best educated
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 people leave. Generally, the benefits of studying abroad appear to me to be greater than the drawbacks, though
countries
 might consider ways of ensuring that the benefits accrue more to the
countries
 providing the foreign
students
 than those receiving them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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