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children should always listen to parents' advice. to what extend do you agree?

#children #parents #advice
While it is no
doubt
 that parents are playing a considerable
role
 in their children's
life
. People
claim
 that kids should always take the
advice
 of their parents. I disagree with
this
 because teachers and
society
 members,
both
 are playing a vital
role
. And
also
 children spend most of
time
 with them. While it is no
doubt
 that parents are playing a considerable
role
 in their children's
life
. People
claim
 that kids should always take the
advice
 of their parents. I disagree with
this
 because teachers and
society
 members,
both
 are playing a vital
role
. And
also
 children spend most of
time
 with them. While it is no
doubt
 that parents are playing a considerable
role
 in their children's
life
. People
claim
 that kids should always take the
advice
 of their parents. I disagree with
this
 because teachers and
society
 members,
both
 are playing a vital
role
. And
also
 children spend most of
time
 with them. To conclude, it is no
doubt
 that parents are playing a considerable
role
 in their children's
life
. People
claim
 that kids should always take the
advice
 of their parents. I disagree with
this
 because teachers and
society
 members,
both
 are playing a vital
role
. And
also
 children spend most of
time
 with them.
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