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More and more students are choosing to study in another country for higher education. Do the benefits of this outweigh the drawbacks?

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Over the
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 few years, there has been a growing trend towards studying aboard among young people. Studying overseas is widely considered as life transforming opportunity as students take on several challenges. I believe that the advantages of
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 outweigh the disadvantages.
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, going abroad allows
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 to gain real knowledge about different things
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 as new languages, cultures and customs. It opens several new horizons for them. By living there
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 can interact and communicate with native speakers daily, students can enhance their language skills. They can simultaneously explore the culture and customs of the host
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. According to a
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survey, 60
% of adults living in a foreign
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 learn language by just having
conversation
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a conversation
conversations
 with natives. It can help in improving their proficiency and promote cultural learning.
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, living in a different
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 makes
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 self-sufficient. While being there
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 encounters many challenges and they have to work on their own which makes them more independent. At
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 they will face difficulties in common things
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 as shopping, grocery, living arrangements, etc.
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But
 later they learn how to do these tasks. It
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 improves their social skills. Despite all the advantages, some people believe that studying in another
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 has many drawbacks.
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, they struggle in adapting the new cultures. It makes them feel lonely and homesick. Many people struggle living alone and in even worse case they
breakdown
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break down
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, in my opinion, the benefits of studying abroad appear to me to be greater than the drawbacks. Studying abroad poses many chances of advancement and at the same time
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 can become
polyglot
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polyglots
a polyglot
, self-reliant and gain cultural knowledge.
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