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Some people believe that university education should be only offered to those who can pay for their own courses and the government should not be expected to fund higher education. To what extent do you agree?

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In
this
 developing world a great deal of universities
offer
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offers
 a
variety
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varied
 range of educational courses.There are many
discussion
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discussions
 has been done about
universities
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university
universities'
 fees which
are the
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are, the
 government should provide financial way whilst another idea is based on the ability of students to pay university fees, namely higher
education
 should be available for students who can pay the cost of their studying expenses.I personally
disagree the
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disagree with the second
second
 idea and l try to clarify my opinion in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, if higher
education
 comes with a cost it creates an inefficient allocation of the human recourse.
This
 is because when there is a financial constraint most of gifted students are not able to afford university fees.
As a result
,
instead
 of being specialist the student can only be a mediocre accountant because he cannot utilize all his potential in his chosen field
,
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,
contrary free
education
 can prevent these kinds of problems. In a like manner
,
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,
if government be disability of students to pay
universities
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university
universities'
 fees, at
such
 a time, it will lose qualified part of society.Exact mentioned part of society can help to develop the country after graduation with their achieved higher
education
 even more than people who paid themselves. In the light of the fact outlined above l disagree that students should pay for their higher
education
.Thereto government should support talented students
for
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in
country's development
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the country's development
a country's development
.
Submitted by Aziza Azamatovna Akhmedova on

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