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The tradition of families getting together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts?

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It often believes by few sections of society that preparing meals at
home
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 is a waste of time. They suggest that eating outside make life comfortable, stress free and sophisticated. I disagree with the statement. In
this
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 essay will decipher various reasons and my standpoint.
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 with, there are many reasons why cooking food in the house will not be in vain.
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, it is way cheaper to eat at
home
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 than to eat at the restaurant.
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 can be illustrated by comparing the ingredients you bought from the market, one vegetable dish in a restaurant is cost triple the amount, it is because there are many workers that have to be paid by them
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 of course it is more expensive eating out.
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, if you yourself prepare for your own meals you are very aware of the ingredients that have been used unlike in the inn it can't guarantee that there is no presence of MSG in your food to taste more delicious.
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 eating outside is hassle free for the reason that you don’t have to spend hours by buying all the needed in the
market
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market, then
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 you have to do all the cooking and prepare the tables and after meals you have to wash the dishes, it is really stressing to cook at
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home but despite
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home, but despite
 of that big savings will remain in your pocket.
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, it can minimize all the stress and make cooking easier if you ask someone else help, it can be your husband or children. In conclusion, in spite of all the benefits of eating in the restaurant, preparing meals at
home
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 is low-cost and those hassles can be lesser by the help of others.
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