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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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The way which the world has been improving the technology people from all countries can purchase alike products through that citizens are starting to get same. I think it is a positive progress because it makes people´s lives easier. It is widely known that technology has been facilitating the life of people, for example through internet people are able to buy goods from all over the world. A well-known shopping website is
aliexpress
 which individuals can find a variety of products from China. It is interesting because people do not need to travel to China just to buy something.
Furthermore
,
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,
with advances in technology nowadays the product does not spend a long time travelling compare to the past when goods were transported only by ship. Today the products are transported by plane, which is faster than the ship.
However when
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However, when
 people are able to buy products from others countries they can have a knowledge about new culture without travel to the
country
 só it is a good opportunity to people who do not have financial support to know a little about a different
country
.
Also through
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Also, through
 it government from many countries can have a exportation relationship between others countries and it helps the economic
country
 In conclusion, the facility to people buy products around the world is a worthwhile development because it helps economic the countries and citizens can have an idea about nee
country
 and it is an opportunity for who cannot travel to buy a different thing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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