It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Sinterklaas
. A
Dutch
tradition
and celebration about a man with a long white beard treating children with presents and sweets, helped by
he's
male possessive pronoun
his
workers ''Zwartepiet" (
blackman
Suggestion
Blackman
black man
). 10 years ago, Sinterklaas was the most
beloving
celebration by
dutch
of or relating to the Netherlands or its people or culture
Dutch
people. These days, the party might never be the same as it used to be. A lot of (
afro
a rounded thickly curled hairdo
Afro
american
of or relating to the United States of America or its people or language or culture
American
)
dutch
of or relating to the Netherlands or its people or culture
Dutch
citizens
where
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
were
always hurt when Sinterklaas came to
holland
a constitutional monarchy in western Europe on the North Sea; half the country lies below sea level
Holland
. That's because they
where
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
were
associated with
blackman
Suggestion
Blackman
the ''slave'' of
sinterklaas
Suggestion
Sinterklaas
. Nobody dared to speak, but when social media
developed
Suggestion
developments
, it was the biggest discussion that I can personally remember. A lot of
dutch
of or relating to the Netherlands or its people or culture
Dutch
people began to hate those people that began the discussion, because they ''occupied''
this
dutch
of or relating to the Netherlands or its people or culture
Dutch
tradition
. In my opinion, Sinterklaas has to be a fun celebration
for
Suggestion
of
all
dutch
of or relating to the Netherlands or its people or culture
Dutch
people.
not
negation of a word or group of words
Not
only for white people, but for everybody. If there are a lot of human beings
hurted
be the source of pain
hurt
by a ''white''
tradition
, especially because we live in a very
multi cultural
of or relating to or including several cultures
multicultural
country, I think we just have to change the fact that ''
blackman
Suggestion
Blackman
'' is the slave of
sinterklaas
Suggestion
Sinterklaas
. Black man is changed and is called
colourman
a line of units following one after another
column
now, and he's is no longer the slave of Sinterklaas. What I am trying to say, a big
dutch
of or relating to the Netherlands or its people or culture
Dutch
tradition
is lost. It all began with social media and developing technology. But we can always start new traditions.
when
Suggestion
When
a
tradition
is not nice for everybody, it doesn't matter if the
tradition
will get lost because of technology. Lately, people dare to speak out on social media greater, than in real life.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
I would say, go and change these traditions if not everybody is happy with it.
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