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Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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These days we can not imagine our lives without
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computer
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computers
a computer
.
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Computer
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The computer
 has become a daily necessity in each and every field of the world.It has become important for everyone to keep a personal
computer
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 with them.Children are not away from its influence and it is now a part and parcel in their lives.
Although
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has been proved
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proved
has proven
is proving
is proven
 to be very useful for children
,
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,
its negative impact has
also
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 been seen due to its excessive usage.I agree that there are negative effects on children due to the daily use of
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computer
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the computer
computers
a computer
 and
this
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 essay will support my opinion in terms of
time
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 and health. Regarding
time
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,
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,
children are becoming depended on computers for their each and every work.They spend a lot of
time
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 sitting in front of it.Apart from their
studies they
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studies, they
 have got addicted
to maintain
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to maintaining
 social networking websites present on the
computer
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.Some children are seen using
computer
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 to watch movies and web series.
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 consumes a lot of
time
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 and they are not even aware of it.An example of
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 is
,
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,
parents are seen giving personal
computer
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 or laptops to their children
,
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,
 thinking that it will help them in their
studies but
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studies, but
 children are using it to have their fun and entertainment whole day. In terms of health
,
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,
it has started to deteriorate their body.Children love to play video games and do online shopping on their
computer
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 which has deprived them
of
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from
 getting out and playing outdoor games.They have developed maintaining a routine in which they take all their meals in front of the
computer
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 which makes them obese.An instance of
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 can be seen
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when in India a data was collected where the maximum reason of obesity in children was because of sitting all the
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 with
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computers
the computer
.
Its
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It's
time
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 that parents as well as school teachers should realize the situation and help their children getting away from it.Parents should minimize their excessive usage and always keep an eye on them.
teachers
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Teachers
 should give them
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 assignments that involves them more in physical activities.Hopefully we would be able to see the change if the awareness
developes
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develops
developed
 and actions will be taken on
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Screen time
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical inactivity
  • Cognitive development
  • Internet addiction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual learning environments
  • Parental controls
  • Moderation
  • Online safety
  • Tech-savvy
  • E-learning
  • Information technology
  • Eye strain
  • Social skills
  • Multitasking
  • Interactive education
  • Health repercussions
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