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Some people think that books should be stopped in school and that videos, films and computers should be used instead. To what extent do you agree

#people #books #school #videos #films #computers
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In
this
 technology era, technology has penetrated every aspect of human lives, according the
way
 what we teach and learn. Some people have gone
further
 and think that books should be stopped completely in teaching and learning process. In my opinion, I do not accord
to
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with
this
, learning in books have
lot
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lots
 of advantages.
To begin
 with, some individuals believe that using computers in schools it is the effective method for children to learn lessons. In
this
way
 kids can understand topics very easy and quick.
For instance
, Youngsters (male or female) can use computers for assignment work and making report for project work. Kids can learn basic things
of
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about
 PC.
Moreover
Teachers
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the Teachers
 can evaluate pupils work too fast and
accurate
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accurately
.
Furthermore some
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Furthermore, some
 guys believe that schools are teaching with
computers it’s
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computers, it’s
 not a right
way
. Books
is
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are
 the best
way
.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
, computers play a significant role in all parts of education. Now a days children must be aware
computer but
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computer, but
computerized but
computerized computerized but
computed but
 not too. In
pupil’s
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pupils’
 teenage computers, bad films can distract the
students
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students'
student's
student
 mindset. Book reading is the cognitive ability and developing the imagination. In past years schools would provide more and more books to students,
using that resources
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using resources that
 students can learn and remember the topics of the subjects. Utilising those
notebooks students
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notebooks, students
 can learn good handwriting.
However
, scribble is very important to pupils. Without good scribble and grammar children cannot perform well in upcoming tasks. It impacts career and academic life of the kids. In conclusion, It is true that, now a
days
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day
 computes are the efficient
way
 to study and memorise topics.
However
 the existence of books is
also
 vital.
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