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Some people think that economic progress is the only way to measure a countries success, while others think that other factors can be used to measure a countries success. What are these Factors? Which do you think are most important?

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The success of a
country
 can only be evaluated
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 its economic advancement over the years,
according to
 some people. Others argue that the remaining factors excluding the above can be used
instead
. In my opinion, the most relevant factor that determines how successful a nation is
,
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 is its number of educated citizens. Economics is undoubtedly one of the top signallers of the successful condition of a
country
. A booming economy is owed to the contribution of both government and the
country
's inhabitants, it indicates the effort and the resulting profit, as quantified by the
country
's assets and cash at hand. Parameters
such
 as the gross domestic products, imports and exports,
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 profit, among many other things,
showcases
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 how good the government is with
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country
's resources and how much it can be trusted by external investors willing to entrust their money with them for business.
However
, economics is only one out of the many other things that could be put into consideration when estimating a nation's worth. The health sector,
for example
, can be used to gauge how seriously the leaders of a
country
 take their citizens.
Also
, there's education, which in my view, is the most important feature to look out for when trying to find out a
country
's achievements. The percentage of educated citizens in a
country
 will somehow have an influence on other sectors.
For instance
, a
country
 that has a literacy rate of 90% can be predicted to contain individuals
that
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 are more than capable
to represent
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 the
country
 well in other sectors, including the health and economic sector that was mentioned earlier. In conclusion,
although
 every sector has its own unique needs which should be looked into, I believe that more attention should be put on education as its success is often evident in the others.
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