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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Provide access to the medical facilities is important to the citizens of every country, though, advancement in medical
treatment
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 has dramatically increased its
cost
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 over the past few decades which is beyond the capacity and affordability for many people. It is the primary responsibility of any
government
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 to provide
health
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 services to the people free of
cost
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however
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.
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, it would be more difficult for the unemployed and for the old aged people to afford the medical facilities because they do not have any income source. It makes them closer to death due to illness. In
such
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 cases, it is the primary responsibility of the
government
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 to provide medical
treatment
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 of the citizens of the country free of
cost
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 without charging a single penny.
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, the
health
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 care services should be prioritizing like people may have access to consultants and other general
treatment
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 free of
cost
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 which is their right to avail them as given by the
government
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. But for some major diseases like cancer, cardiac attack and
coivd
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-19 needs more care and attention though. It requires lots of
cost
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 involve. So there must be a restriction for
such
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treatment
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 which can be provided to some patients only not to all depending on the criticality of the patients. To conclude, i would like to emphasize that
health
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 is primary need of every individual and providing free
health
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treatment
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 by the
government
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 should consider as a basic need but providing access to major
treatment
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 may have some restrictions as it involves a lot of
cost
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 , expertise and technology which might have a challenge for the
government
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 to allow for all the patients at the same time.
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