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In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Is it a positive or negative development in your opinion? To what extent do you support this development?

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In the recent years, the internet has gained so much popularity, and it has become an important means of communication for people.
Therefore
, some individuals advocate that nowadays, there is no need to communicate face-to-face with others as one can live and perform daily tasks using
net
Suggestion
the net
a net
nets
. In my opinion,
this
 is a negative development, and I will defend my view in the coming paragraphs.
First
 of all,
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 is not suitable for every class.
This
 is because those who do not know how to use a computer or cannot reap its benefits, which restricts its usage to a few sections of society. To exemplify, it is difficult for elderly or uneducated people
to use
Suggestion
use
 it as they do not know how to use it.
Moreover
, only financially secured people can afford the expensive PCs and data packs and think of virtual communication.
In contrast
, the poor people still do their tasks by physically present at the workplaces.
Besides
this
, online frauds are getting more and more prevalent that it is not suitable to get every work done via the web. If we talk about the recent trend of making friends online; it is not reliable as one cannot trust anyone without personally knowing any individual.
Furthermore
, if we consider online shopping,
then
 one can only purchase the stuffs by seeing pictures and read about its features on the screen and many times, things that deliver are different from those we ordered. In conclusion,
although
 the internet has made things quite easier for us, it is not possible to rely on it for every task, and
hence
 cannot be considered as a positive development. I believe that face-to -face communication has more influence and reliability than virtual presence.
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