Some people claim that museums and art galleries are not needed today, because everyone can see historical objects or art works by computer. Do you agree or disagree

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few people felt that mobile phones are affecting for social
interactive
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interaction
interactions
. Present condition the technology
are
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is
steadly
at a steady rate or pace
steadily
growing and developed
new variety
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a new variety
new varieties
of
medium
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mediums
media
,
thus
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decrease the face to face interaction. Modern
technology
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technology's
play's major role in
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less social
intraction
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interaction, such
interaction such
interactions such
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as mobile
phone
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and
application
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.
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discuss
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discusses
about modern technology to compress the conversation among the people. Present
technolgy
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
technologies
are making
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is making
the
people
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peoples
person's
peoples'
laziness. Nowadays
variety
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a variety
the variety
of
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phone
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phones
available in
market
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the market
and
that
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is the price
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the price is also
also
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considerably
cheap
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cheaper
. So all are using the
phone
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and maximum relies on
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one.
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the network price very cheap for the call. All the people does not like to meet and immediately call and convey the massage as
instantely
without delay or hesitation; with no time intervening
instantly
. Earlier the
peaple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
peoples
directly go to wish and greeting, Presently only sending the message
instead
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of directly go to the event.
Furthremore its
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Furthermore, it
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Furthermore it
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has been complicating day
today
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to day
life
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life, such
such
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us
to the same degree (often followed by 'as')
as
relative bond and
freindship
the state of being friends (or friendly)
friendship
. Nowadays all persons are working in
accross
to the opposite side
across
the country so all
are convey
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are conveying
have conveyed
the message
throgh
from beginning to end
through
phone
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,
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impact to reduce the relative bond between parents and child.
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Secondly many
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Secondly, many
teenagers are using
diffrent
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different applications
different application
a different application
application
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. The
application
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related to the game, chat and social media.
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facebook
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Facebook
, it is
connecting
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connected
to the all
peaple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
peoples
purple
and
easily
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easy
to
intract
act together or towards others or with others
interact
instruct
accross
to the opposite side
across
the world. So all are thinking no need to meet directly and better to chat with social media or chat medium. Present day many
peaple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
are addicted some other
appliecation
the act of bringing something to bear; using it for a particular purpose
application
applications
and spending more time on those
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application
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applications
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as games and photo shop. It is affecting their valuable time and reducing their innovative thinking way. In my point of view the phones and other media
realy
in accordance with truth or fact or reality
really
relay
rely
to
distace
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destroy
destroys
the social interaction.
inspite
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In spite
Inspite
of using the cell
phone
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to thinks alternative
ways
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ways, such
such
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reading a good book and thinking a new valuable idea to help to improve our society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual
  • digital
  • online
  • accessibility
  • inclusivity
  • cultural heritage
  • physical experience
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