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1. Many people believe that the internet has a bigger impact on people’s lives because it is more popular than television. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support you position.

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In
this
 modern world, many people are surfing the
internet
 for different purposes and it has risen today while the
internet
 has a bigger impact on the people's lives today.
Therefore
, I strongly agree that, the
internet
 has become the most popular media than the other media like television, radio and newspapers.
Firstly
, it can be said that, nowadays the many people have the opportunity to access the
internet
 within few seconds and they can get the any information within seconds. So,
this
 can be really benefited the many people who are engaged in a variety of fields
such
 as education, business, global news, law and legal news, sport news, weather news and much more.
For example
, the recent study done by the California University revealed that, the most popular
source
 of the media is known as the
internet
 according to the global marketing survey in 2019.
Further
, revealed that, many of the variety of people are browsing and downloading the documents and the other hand, many authors is publishing many articles and journals via online
instead
 publishing it as hard copies.
Secondly
, due to the less time consuming and the reliability of
this
source
, many users started to familiar with
this
 media and now it's even more improving than using the television and the radio.
Also
, the people have an opportunity to use everything they wanted from the
internet
, so they only needed to have to access
this
 connection whether it's cable or wireless connection. To conclude
this
, it can be said that, the
Internet
 has become the fastest growing media in the world and many people are so familiar with
this
source
 than any other
source
 in
this
 world now.
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