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It is generally seen that most working people do not do enough physical exercise What are the reasons behind this? How can this problem be solved?

#people #exercise
Now-a-days people pack their schedule with
bunch
Suggestion
a bunch
 of work which triggers their monthly income most of the time. Another reason might be people are
streesful
extremely irritating to the nerves
stressful
 in
modern age
Suggestion
the modern age
.They are always in
hurry
Suggestion
a hurry
 to make both ends meet and
then
 to earn extra income to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their unnecessary desire like luxury item smart TV
in stead
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
 of usual colour TV,
Iphone
Suggestion
iPhone
IPhone
iPhones
phone
instead
 of regular phone which is enough for surfing in the internet and upload picture. People now-a-days feel competitive.Want to exceed other's status or at least equal to others.These all combined them to rush in a packed office schedule rather than keep enjoying nature to cool down their
rushness
the trait of acting rashly and without prudence
rashness
richness
 in thinking and working. People want instant result, instant income.They are not tolerant of delaying.To get rid of these monotonous
situation
Suggestion
situations
, policy makers should enforce staunch measures regarding office time, maintain
proper healthy habit
Suggestion
the proper healthy habit
a proper healthy habit
 to have a long peaceful, less stressed life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exercise regimen
  • personal goals
  • individual pace
  • convenience
  • motivation
  • peer pressure
  • structured classes
  • social dynamics
  • accountability
  • external motivation
  • self-discipline
  • peer support
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