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1. Tourism is an ever-growing industry. What benefits do you think tourism brings to individuals and society?

#tourism #industry #individuals #society
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 time,
tourism
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 is a growing industry. Presently, worlds population is kept growing.
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, competition for lively hood is becoming more and more difficult. Obviously, to survive, we need to work very hard in the
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 competitive era. Generally, in the previous days ladies used to be housewives and there used to be joint families. But, the present scenario is different. Most of the couples are working and migrated to metropolitan cities. At least, once a year, many prefer to go out, maybe it is within the country and some who are in a higher ranking position to got for world tours for a change and the relaxation. It boosts and make them refresh for the coming days to work more energetically.
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,
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 helps the individuals. Now to start with countries, presently many countries are depending on
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tourism industry
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the tourism industry
. Not all the countries have natural resources to survive on their own.
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, Philippines. Majorly, it depends on the
tourism
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.
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, Dubai, even though petrol is the main
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source
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,
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 made
tourism
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 one of its main
income
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source
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. Anytime petrol can be finished. So, They have made
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 as an alternative
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 of
income
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 for the country. Because of
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, tourist guides get their lively hood.
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, jobs for the tourist guides.
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, to conclude,
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 brings enjoyment and refreshment to the individuals, jobs to the tourist guides and
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 of
income
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 to lots of countries.
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