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companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities. To what extend do you agree?

#companies #sports #facilities #communities
Local communities need a variety of tools to facility their daily life, for
this
 reason, companies should take responsibilities for providing them in communities like that. While
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 disagree with
this
 view. It is the power's duty to provide people with all kinds of needs in the regional communities. The regime is in complete charge of citizens, in urban or rural areas for a better life. Since
it
it is
it's
 considered as factual parents for its people, and elected by them.
it
Suggestion
It
 is expected to serve residents, ranging from cities to urban communities without discriminations, by supplying them,
such
 as, transportations, clubs, swimming pools including agricultural instruments, whatever is required for the area. In
this
 form, authorities, rural life which later results in the growth of the economy in the country as a whole. Committing
this
 task to companies, in which they are totally based on interest, will not bring good consequences. Because they demand high prices in return from the local people that the majority of them may not have enough money to afford it.
as
Suggestion
As
 a result, it affects agricultural development. The agricultural sector is one of the most important sectors in some countries, regarded as the backbone of their economy,
therefore
, it is imperative to be taken into consideration that it managed completely by the state rather than private sectors. In conclusion, local communities must have all essential services as the area is a farming area, ministry must not ignore them by committing them to business companies since they are vital locations concerning the economy for the country.
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