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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents

#people #talents
As known, some people are born with a certain
talent
 and others are not. And I agree with the statement that everyone can be taught to become a sports person, musician and so on. Talented children have a lucky gift because they have a born skill for something. Unfortunately, most of them don'
t
 use
this
 possibility. Sometimes parents make their children pursue something, that they don'
t
 like.
As a result
, these children will choose another
area
 in the future and will lose their
talent
. I'm sure that the person, having some flair, should always improve his skills.
Consequently
, there isn'
t
 any future without hard work.
On the other hand
, any child can become a very successful person in his job or hobby. The children learn very quickly. For
this
 reason, in our childhood sometimes our parents made us take part in different courses of painting, music, languages, etc. But it doesn'
t
 mean that an adult wouldn'
t
 reach
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 success if he changes his
area
. The main way to achieve your purpose to learn a lot. Practice and persistence will help you to improve your skills.
For instance
, I am the best example. I studied technical faculty at a university. I envied how my classmates solved some difficult mathematical tasks and programming. I think some of them have
talent
, but not all. During a long time, I practiced in programming and learned mathematical algorithms.
As a result
, I have a good job as a developer. I couldn'
t
 imagine that I will develop some programs in the future. As regards, some of my classmates, having
talent
, work in another
area
. Overall, I think the most important thing is hardworking.
Talent
 is an advantage, but it's not necessary. The children,
borning
the act of burning something
burning
 with a certain
talent
, are lucky, but it
isn'
Suggestion
hasn't obliged
isn't obliging
doesn't oblige
t
 obliged them to do
this
. Any child can reach the hit in any
area
by
Suggestion
of
 learning and practice.
Submitted by Anna Yaroshchyk on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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