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In the future, it may be scientifically possible for people to live for 150 years. This could be good news for individuals but it may have negative consequences for our society. What are the benefits and risks of people living to 150?

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Undoubtedly, from many centuries’s people always dream of living longer years. Though,
this
 is not possible in reality,
however
, if in case people start living longer like hundred and fifty years, it would be a beneficial to an individual.
On the contrary
, there would be detrimental effects on the living society, which I will try to enunciate in my essay. To commence with, there would be multifarious benefits in case if people start living more than a normal living age.
Firstly
, the number of years means, they can spend more time with their families, even they can see their children growing older.
Moreover
, if a person would live for a number of years, they can contribute more in the development of society.
For example
, a doctor who is a well known surgeon can do more operations to save more people.
Additionally
, if eminent personalities live longer years than they can earn more money and more fame. By the contrast, there can be negative adverse effects in society, if people start living in a particular age which nobody imagine would be possible. Apparently, it can create problems for the government of a nation, as they need to spend a huge amount for paying pensions to the older generations.
Consequently
, younger generations need to bear more tax to support the regime for providing health and other medical facilities to the growing population of old people.
Furthermore
, if a person lives for a number of years,
then
 after a certain age because of painful maladies
such
 as arthritis, body organs will not support completely. To recapitulate, indubitably living longer years have pros,
however
 looking at the above facts, in my opinion negative effects outweigh the positive sides.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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