n the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching large numbers of students, but now with the development of technology for education, many people think there is no justification for attending lectures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Traditionally, the teacher gives
lectures
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a large number of students as their way of teaching.
However
, because of many
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technology
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that
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invented,
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of
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teaching changed. The majority of society suggests that attending
lectures
are
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just a waste of time. I disagree with the statement and
this
essay will decipher various reasons for my standpoint.
To begin
with, we all know that there are many sources of information available on the internet, just one click and it will be given to you,
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can be searched via
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, YouTube etc.
However
, not all of us could understand it without the help of professional teachers.
This
can be illustrated by my own experience, I tried to take a
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master's
Degree in Nursing
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online, but I couldn't understand any of the
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modules
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given to me without the guidance of the professor.
Additionally
, attending
lectures
with many students
help
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them to participate personally with others,
therefore
socialization develops
while
you are present
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the lecture room.
Moreover
, lecturers are highly educated
that
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had
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been through a lot of examinations to become a reliable source of information and how to deal with the
student
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students
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in person.
For instance
, they know if the pupils
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with some aspect of the subject, of
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they will pay attention to where you are weak
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to the data you get without explaining
further
. In conclusion,
although
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the advancement
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of technology in education has been invented, there
were
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is
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no better than attending
lectures
with many pupils.
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task response
Your essay does not fully address the task. You should explore both the advantages of lectures and the benefits of technology, and clearly state your position.
coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. Make sure to introduce your position clearly at the beginning and summarize your points in a concluding paragraph.

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