In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In several countries, seniors live in houses which offer care facilities

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as nurses, who will make sure these older individuals are healthy and safe.

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, those places are not free, someone has to pay for it. Indeed, in some cases families contribute financially with it, but there are situations and places in the world where

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a governmental responsibility. In my point of view, both groups should be involved as we know that there are old people who do not have a family.

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and foremost, a society should respect older people, giving them all the support they need.

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, the state should assume

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responsibility of taking care of

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part of the population as a recognition of their contribution for that country's growth.

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is important because,

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, there are a lot of old people who do not have a family and

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who cannot afford the cost of living.

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, I believe that doing

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the government will not only recognize their importance, but

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protecting those peoples lives.

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, if these people have family, they should give the full support to their older relatives.

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will extend the governmental capacity to help others who really need it. For illustration, in half of the older population is being supported by their families, the other half can have their care guaranteed by the state.

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, I believe that it will

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bring benefits for the society, as the population will see that the country administration will respect them in the future if they need. In conclusion, I believe that both families and government must be responsible for our seniors well being.

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, for each different situation, it is necessary to have a different approach, protecting at the end those who contribute a lot to build our society.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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309 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Aging population
Elderly care
Nursing homes
Social welfare
Intergenerational responsibility
Caregiving
Financial burden
Quality of life
Pension funds
Healthcare policy
Taxation
Subsidies
Private insurance
Long-term care
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