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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country others think that government should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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There has been a debate as to whether people should be paid at different
salary
 levels. Some people suggest that people can contribute more if they get paid more, while others think fixed
salary
 range would be more appropriate. In my perspective, I support the idea that people can earn high salaries if they are doing more dangerous or intelligence work.
Fixed
Suggestion
The fixed salary range
salary
 range can help companies to save budgets and reduce competitions. With the fixed
salary
, both companies and candidates know what to expect so both parties do not need to
wast e
spend thoughtlessly; throw away
waste
 time on discussing
salary
 during interviews. Setting a limitation
for
Suggestion
of
salary
 can
also
 help to reduce competitions.
For example
, some people do not have an advanced computer certificate can still apply for an
assitant
a person who contributes to the fulfillment of a need or furtherance of an effort or purpose
assistant
 job, knowing the
salary
 will not change even if they got one.
On the other hand
, high pay
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