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Some people believe that museums should be free to everyone and not charge an entry fee. To what extent do you agree ?

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Museum
Suggestion
The museum
A museum
 is a place to exhibit. Inside it, there are lots of information that will educate visitors. From nature to culture,
museum
Suggestion
the museum
offer
Suggestion
offers
 people a great
oppurtunity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
opportunities
 to learn more and to gain more knowledges.
Museum
Suggestion
The museum
 is
also
 a tourist attraction. There are many
debate
Suggestion
debates
 about
museum
 entry
fee
 and
charge
. Some people think it should be free and
somevthink
an unspecified thing, agency, amount, etc.
something
 the opposite. In
this
 essay, I will explain why
museum
 shouldn't be free and why we need to
charge
 an entry
fee
.
First
, if
museum
take
Suggestion
takes
charge
this
 will help the
economy
 and tourism. The
fee
enterance
promise of reimbursement in the case of loss; paid to people or companies so concerned about hazards that they have made prepayments to an insurance company
insurance
 might help the government
to build
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build
 the
economy
.
Furtermore
in addition
Furthermore
,
museum
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the museum
a museum
museums
 can be a brilliant
economy
 prospect and promise the bright income. Another reason why, it is because a
museum
 need taking care.
For example
,
museum
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the museum
need
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needs
 to hire people to
cleaning
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clean
, for services, security guard, etc. From that entry
fee
 that money can hire employee and will help to reduce unemployment number. The advantages from
this
charge
fee
 will help many different people and institution. In conclusion, I would suggest
museum
 to take a
charge
. Because there will be many advantages to people and will help the
economy
 to grow.
However
, for
this
 to be possible,
museum
Suggestion
the museum
 should offer an experience
that is
 worth with the
enterance
something that provides access (to get in or get out)
entrance
fee
 that people paid.
Museum
Suggestion
The museum
 should be more creative and innovative so that people will interested and come to visit.
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