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Children have more and more tests and exams to do at school, sometimes starting from the age of 5 or 6, right up until the age of 18. What are the advantage and disadvantage of making children do exams?

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In today’s rapidly developing society, teenagers have to do a numerous of examinations through their childhood up to their adolescent. While I accept that children could benefit from
this
 education, I would argue that there
are
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is
 some disadvantage in
this
 way of education. In the one hand, I believe that there are serious drawbacks, which outweigh these benefits. It is obvious that at the age of five or six, kids are too small to aware of the
vital
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vitality
most vital
 of studying as well as the examinations. At that time, their brain has not completely developed yet, it leads to the subjective evaluation (đánh giá chủ quan) of teachers as well as their parents. From that they could indirectly orient for their children in wrong ways. What’s more, I mention to the pressure of children when they are in the exams. At the age of five or six, children need more time to access
with
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to
 the nature to develop their
creation
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creativity
creative
 and imagination as well as playing outdoor activities to enhance their body.
Instead
, today they have to
spent
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spend
 almost their whole time staying at home to do their homework and dealing with the tension of
examination period
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the examination period
. It makes them may have an obsession with studying and the word “Exam” may be the nightmare of the lives
for
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of
 most of the students. One of the most realistic illustrations for these is nowadays the high rate of depression children are more and more increasing, it even leads to many
case
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cases
 of suicide due to suffering from studying pressure. In the other hand, there are important benefits for having periodic assessments.
First
 of all, they could find it easy to know the weak or strong points
of
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about
 kids, children might have the right orientation
from
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for
 the adults and being
success
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successful
 in
future
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the future
.
However
, as I mentioned above, if kids are too small, it will be wrong.
In addition
, the nature of human is
competition
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the competition
, in order to develop, human need a lot of competitions to be promoting.
This
 is the reason why periodic examinations
is
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are
 one of the best
way
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ways
 for kids to have a strong motivation to study harder and harder to get high marks. To recapitulate, there are a lot of benefits or even serious drawbacks that children should have the periodic assessments, but I believe that it had better endorse the suitable age to force children to do
exam
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an exam
the exam
exams
.
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