Some people think that environment problem should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally Discuss the both the sides and give your opinion
It is a fact and it's high time and be serious about environmental
problems
.Environment
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Environmental
problem
is now global
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a global
problem
and this
needs to take
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be taken
it
seriously. Correct pronoun usage
apply
When many
suggest that the entire Rephrase
Many
world
needs to unite and work on solving this
global issue, but some still believe that it should be solved nationally first.In this
essay
I will be discussing Add a comma
essay,
about
both Remove the preposition
apply
the
views and conclude my view on the said subject.
Environmental Correct article usage
apply
problems
are rising all over the world
and it is a serious situation for everyone
of us.It is Replace the word
every one
global
Correct article usage
a global
problem
now, I personally believe that the entire world
needs to unite to solve this
pandemic. Developed countries like USA
, China, Russia, Correct article usage
the USA
India
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and India
needs
to unite and work on how to prevent these Correct subject-verb agreement
need
problems
. And what can be done to solve this
problem
, For example
, America has the most advanced technology to prevent forest fires, heavy
snow Correct word choice
and heavy
storm
and Fix the agreement mistake
storms
thus
they can help other countries to prevent the same problem
.There is a saying that "HELP OTHERS TO HELP YOURSELF". This
can be solved by providing meeting
on an international level, Sharing ideas, Fix the agreement mistake
meetings
developing
new technologies.Correct word choice
and developing
This
provides a wide range of solution
to each other.
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solutions
While
on the other hand
, I don't believe that this
problem
can be solved on a national basis.Researchers suggest that environmental problems
will take another 50 years to heal even if an entire world
comes together.thus
it is hard for one nation to handle this
.Dealing this
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with this
problem
national
puts Change the word
nationally
limitation
on Fix the agreement mistake
limitations
use
of modern technologies.
In a nutshell, I conclude that Correct article usage
the use
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the environment
environment
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environmental
problem
is not one
or Correct article usage
a one
two day
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two-day
problem
.It will take ages to solve this
pandemic and hence
it's not the cup of tea for one nation to deal with it.So I strongly believe that environmental problem
should be solved globally.Fix the agreement mistake
problems
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task response
Ensure that the essay directly addresses the prompt given. Develop the main points in a more balanced manner, presenting arguments for both global and national approaches.
coherence and cohesion
Work on creating a more cohesive and coherent essay structure, utilizing clear topic sentences and logical transitions between ideas.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite