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human activity has had a negative impacts on plants and animals around the world. some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe that actions can be taken to bring out a change. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A lot of negative impact to the
environment
 are caused by human activities. Some people believe that
this
situation
 can be changed while others do not.
This
 essay will discuss both arguments in detail and provides evidence on why we can
change
 the
situation
. On the one hand, right now the
environment
 is severely damaged.
For instance
, there are several Environmental issues that are caused by human activities
such
 as pollution, global warming, and illegal logging. Even if we try to reduce the activities that damage the
environment
, there is not much act we can take to help the
environment
.
Then
, what can we do?
On the other hand
, people believe that
this
situation
 can be changed and great changes need powerful hand. In
this
 case, the government has the power to create a law and punish offenders. Humans will not stop damaging the
environment
 unless it does not benefit them.
For instance
, a factory will not cease dumping waste in a nearby river if they think it does not affect their profit. By creating a law or taxing the company, they might
change
.
Second
, people can
also
 start small actions like using public transportations to reduce air pollutions, and do reforestation.
Finally
, in my opinion, we can
change
this
situation
 by doing small things
such
 as using public transportations
instead
 of personal transportations, reduce the use of air conditioner, stop littering, and cease hunting wild animals. In conclusion, even though the
environment
 is severely damaged, we can bring a
change
 by doing things I mentioned earlier. The government can
also
 take an act
such
 as creating laws and punish the offenders.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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