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You are living in a University residence, and you have a problem with the high levels of noise from a new campus restaurant which is open late at night. Write a letter to the governor of the University. In your letter, •Complain about the situation •Say why this is a problem •And propose ways to reduce the noise

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Dear Mr Jackson, I am writing to complain about the amount of noise coming from the new canteen
that is
 recently opened next to the university
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. The new restaurant has live music and opens every night until 12:30 am. The sound of loud music, which combines by shouting and laughing of its customers,
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 the sleep of all the students who live in the residence.
As a result
, we are not able to sleep properly at night and
this
 will have
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 impact on our study. I would like to suggest that the campus authority restricts the opening hours of the restaurant to 11:00 pm in the weekdays and allows music band at the weekends only. Another solution would be to install some signage in the restaurant to remind the clients to be more considerate and keep their voice to the minimum. Thank you for your attention to
this
 important matter. Kind Regards, Negar Sedigh
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grammar
Check for minor grammatical errors, such as 'which combines by shouting' should be 'which is combined with shouting'.
task achievement
Consider elaborating on how the noise specifically affects your studies. This would add more depth to your problem statement.
suitable writing tone
Clear and polite tone maintained throughout the letter.
logical structure
Logical structure with separate paragraphs for introduction, problem explanation, and suggestions.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriately used and polite.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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