Writing Task 1: You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter, • explain why you changed jobs • describe your new job • tell him / her your other news

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Dear Bode, I hope

this

letter will find you in the pink of your health. I am writing

this

letter to let you know that I have recently switched to a new job as my previous job was not so challenging, and there were very

little

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learning opportunities. I have joined as an IT specialist at Google Corporation. As you might be aware that

this

is the most prominent IT organization in the world, and it was my dream to work for

this

company. I am currently working in the search engine area, and my responsibilities are to optimize the google search engine.

This

assigned task is a real-world situation, and

thus

I believe will boost my knowledge, and

hence

, will undoubtedly result in growth in my career.

Also

, I want to bring to your knowledge that I am getting married

month.

Therefore

, I want you to be here on

this

occasion at least a week before, and I need no excuses from you. Hope to see you

month at my marriage. Cheers, Tyler

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

176 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Writing Task 1: You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter, • explain why you changed jobs • describe your new job • tell him / her your other news

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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