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QUESTION: Some people say the best way to discourage smoking is to make smoking illegal on public places. Other people say that this is not enough and other measures are needed. Discuss both views and give tour own opinion

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In many countries, smoking in
public area
Suggestion
a public area
 is officially banned in order to try to prevent people from smoking as well as passive smoking,
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however some
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however, some
 people think that only lifting smoking ban would not make
big impact
Suggestion
a big impact
 on those who have unhealthy
habit
Use synonyms
 and others feel that prohibit public smoking is adequate unpleasant for smokers.
This
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 essay will discuss the two points of view above and provide my own opinion. In my opinion, law against smoking are an important part of discouraging
this
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 bad
habit
Use synonyms
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 do not believe any
further
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 methods are needed. At the time of many
building
Suggestion
buildings
, apartment, workplaces and even public areas are free smoking places, the smokers would not find many chances to keep that bad
habit
Use synonyms
.
In addition
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, if they are getting caught smoking at
smoking free area
Suggestion
the smoke free area
smoke free area
, smokers will be strictly fined so that
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think these laws are very strong barriers to their
habit
Use synonyms
.
Howerver
Suggestion
However
, there are
much
Suggestion
many
 more things need to be done to discourage completely smoking.
Firstly
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, these laws are usually imposed
at
Suggestion
in
on
 urban areas,
where as
on the other hand
whereas
 the number of
smoker
Suggestion
smokers
 is
also
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 very high so that we should have more solutions
that is
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 much more
approriate
suitable for a particular person or place or condition etc
appropriate
 to rural areas
such
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 as increasing the price of cigarette, spreading the toxic of smoking.
Secondly
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,
alot
Suggestion
a lot
 of
teenager
Suggestion
teenagers
 are not capable of
disginguishing
mark as different
distinguishing
 right from wrong, curiosity drives them into imitating smokers around them so that teaching about the
toxic
Suggestion
toxicity
toxicities
toxin
 of smoking should be carried out on children at
very young age
Suggestion
a very young age
.
Inconclusion
Suggestion
In conclusion
, banning smoking
at
Suggestion
in
 public places is enough to minimize the number of smokers.
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