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Some people believe that tourists should accept social and environmental responsibility while others believe that tourists should not accept any responsibility at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Responsible
tourism
 has unquestionably become a more important necessity due to millions of
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 each year. Social enthusiasts both in the developing and the developed world have debated that if tourists should accept social and environmental responsibilities.
This
 essay will provide an interpretation by which one can highly agree that accepting the local responsibilities is paramount. Two main reasons affect
tourism
 because of disobedience.
First
 and foremost, tourists leave a negative opinion.
In other words
, sometimes tourists feel uncomfortable to follow the local culture or practices. Extensive research by the Times Magazines demonstrates that in 70% of tourist places, local communities were being offended by the improper
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 of previous tourists which has lead to protests on
tourism
 ban. The
second
 factor linked to the
first
, Tourist destinations can have a detrimental effect due to pollution. There is ample evidence that every year tons of plastic waste are thrown on the Marina beach which is costing the government millions of dollars to clean up the debris.
On the other hand
, being a responsible tourist has a couple of advantages. One can receive good respect from the local inhabitants. To illustrate, Psychology studies claim that foreigners who are in
copacetic
capability to perform or produce
capacities
 with the environment can render love and affection
from
Suggestion
of
 the local people.
Also
, following the guidelines of the
tourism
Suggestion
tourist
touristy
 places may preserve the tourist places for the
further
 generation as well. To conclude, it can be understood that the negative impact of
tourism
 may lose the quality of the local community and contributes to polluting the environment. Though
tourism
 sectors have a critical role to play, individuals
also
 need to take responsibility
in
Suggestion
to
 not bring uncertainty to the inhabitants and the environment.
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