People attend colleges universities for many different reason.( for example new experience, or career properation) what do you think about attend college or universities.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
During the previous decades, college and universities- trend exist around the world substantially. These days majority of
people particularly
Accept comma addition
people, particularly
adults would attend college or universities to gather
widerange
Suggestion
a wide range
wide range
of experience or increase knowledge. I stick the idea that it is good for his or her future career.
This
following essay will point out key factors and
authors
Suggestion
author's
personal viewpoint will be provided. To
beging
take the first step or steps in carrying out an action
begin
Beijing
with a large
numbers
Suggestion
number
of people
strongly say
Suggestion
strongly says
that going to universities to get
further
education to enhance their horizon or improve their job
pasition
the particular portion of space occupied by something
position
positions
. While it is clear that if we take people who have
diplome
a document certifying the successful completion of a course of study
diploma
diplomas
as an
example they
Accept comma addition
example, they
would find
better job
Suggestion
a better job
better jobs
with satisfaction
solary
something that remunerates
salary
.
Accoring
Suggestion
According
to the recent article published in the
Russia
Suggestion
Russian
newspaper, it revealed that 65% boss
always try
Suggestion
always tries
to accept employees with
diplome
a document certifying the successful completion of a course of study
diplomas
. As far as
l
know it is impossible to find
job
Suggestion
jobs
with out
in absence of
without
certificate or
diplome
a document certifying the successful completion of a course of study
diploma
. What
l
mean by
this
is that it
helps
Suggestion
will help
to achieve success in the future. From my perspective
l
willingly say that so some politicians should open door for youth people study with affordable prize
.
Accept space
.
If all education had equipped with contemporary technology, youth would have
passes
Suggestion
passed
pass
exam
Suggestion
the exam
exams
with flying
colour
Suggestion
colours
. On the one hand as for statistic 45% local citizen
cleam
assert or affirm strongly; state to be true or existing
claim
seem
claims
to say that youth people has to restrict study a lot, and attend
widerange
Suggestion
a wide range
wide range
of sport activities
such
as
foodball
any of various games played with a ball (round or oval) in which two teams try to kick or carry or propel the ball into each other's goal
football
,
Accept space
,
table tennis and so on and so forth
.
Accept space
.
It is evident that sport is beneficial for our health
.
Accept space
.
By way of
conclosin
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
,
althought
even though, in spite of the fact that
although
there is an opposite
arguments
Suggestion
argument
,
l
routinely say
Suggestion
routinely says
that attending college or universities is essential to achieve success and
also
good for
career path
Suggestion
a career path
.
Accept space
.
Bro
please
Suggestion
pleases
evaluate my work and give feedback
...
Accept space
...
Submitted by Gulrukh Shodmonkulova on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: