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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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Our
environment
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 is dilapidated due to numerous irresponsible activities of human beings.
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 essay will put light on the major ways of exploiting our
environment
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 and the responsibilities of the government as well as people to tackle
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 grave problem. The main threats to our
environment
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 are the air pollution and the faulty waste management. It is evident
that unpresidented number of
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that an unprecedented number of
that unprecedented number of
 factories and automobile emit tonnes of carbon dioxide and other noxious gases directly to the
environment
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.
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, these substances cause global warming, and
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 trigger the domino effect of it.
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, our surroundings are hit by garbage even more. As factories and people throw their wastes indiscriminately, these end up mixing with water, or even stinking the air. Government can take some initiatives to alleviate these problems. Implementing strict laws on the factories and the vehicles to use technological resorts to minimize the carbon footprint. Now-a-days,
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, the cement factories of Bangladesh are now enforced to use treatment plants before releasing gases to the
environment
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Moreover organized
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Moreover, organized
 and well-planned management system could curb the contamination of water, leading to save under-water biodiversity. As a citizen it is a civic responsibility to create awareness to resolve the issue. It can be materialized by prioritizing the public transport
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 of private, as it can potentially reduce the usage of
fossils
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fossil
 fuel,
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 decreasing the impact of global warming. On top of that, using biodegradable products can certainly be a favour to the waste disposal system because unlike plastics, they do not harm our
environment
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. In conclusion, it seems that hazardous gases released from industries and automobiles are the principle reasons of pollution.
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, by creating regulations and awareness state as well
as citizen can
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as a citizen can
 play
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a crucial role
crucial role
 to address
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 serious matter.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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