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Some people are of the opinion that there should be a car-free day once every month, on which no private vehicles are allowed on the road. Discuss the advantages and possible disadvantages.

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 analyses the positives of non-usage of automobiles in the public lanes and
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 discusses its negatives with valid reasons and suitable examples.
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 the brighter side, if no personal vehicles are allowed on the road, the pollution level in the country can be drastically reduced.
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, people suffering from the
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respiratory disorder characterized by wheezing; usually of allergic origin
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 disease will take a sigh of relief. On the darker side, people from poorer background who doesn't own a car might face the brunt of using the public transport. It would become a huge problem for commuters to rely only on government buses. We may miss reaching our
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, if there is no proper bus schedule in place, the working professionals may not reach the office
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 time due to the delay in the arrival time of the bus. In Conclusion, I would like to say that, though by not permitting the individual's self-transport on the streets, we can bring down the air-pollution level in the nation, but still its not a viable option for people to use a public transport during emergencies.
Submitted by Mayandi Karunanithi on

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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