people who wanted to become professional athletes gave up this idea because of the fear of failure and parents’ pressure. Do you think that parents should support their children who want to do a career in sports?

In sport industries, there are a lot of potential children or teenagers who grudgingly quit their dream to be a professional due to their parents’ prejudice and
unconfidence
. From my perspective, as parents of one
child
, they have a responsibility to support their
kid
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kids
to follow their favourable career. There is a wide recognition that children with encouragement from parents are more successful than children without supporting. The
first
explanation for
this
would be that by encouraging the kids
,
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,
they will have more motivation to their works, and they will be able to keep training or learning conveniently with serious attitude.
For instance
, the best footballer in the world-Lionel Messi was able to keep up with his soccer career thanks to his father financial help
.
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.
Another convincing idea would be that people have different kind of intelligence
.
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.
If the biased parents force their
child
with
kinesthetic
intelligence to be a doctor or an
enginner
a person who uses scientific knowledge to solve practical problems
engineer
, it
woulld
past tense of "will"
would
be unsuitable
to
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for
their
child
.
Accept space
.
For example
,
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,
there was a famous dancer who was a
dissapointment
a feeling of dissatisfaction that results when your expectations are not realized
disappointment
for
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to
her parents due to bad results at school
,
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,
however
,
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,
their parents were able to discover her dancing talents and passion
,
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,
so they decided to support her to pursue her dream
.
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.
Apart from the practical benefit above
,
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,
there are still a few reasons why parents are reluctant to encourage their
child
to become a professional athlete
.
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.
Firstly
,
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,
the sport career often doesn’t
last
longer than 10 to 15 years
,
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,
so the athletes may become an
unemployee
not engaged in a gainful occupation
unemployed
after their retirement
.
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.
Secondly
,
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,
parents are protective
,
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,
so they would be aware of sport injuries that could lead their
child
to be
paralyzed
affected with paralysis
paralysed
penalized
or even die
.
Accept space
.
However
,
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,
these are just minor
occassions
something done (usually as opposed to something said)
actions
occasions
that hardly happen
.
Accept space
.
In conclusion
,
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,
I reiterate that parents should encourage their
child
if they want to be a professional sportsman
although
there are still few risks.
Submitted by Nhật Linh Đỗ on

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